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There wasn't much time left. Out of the chaos, the threads had aligned and were pulling, pulling, pulling! - soon, they would break. Though paired segments of precious code still clung desperately to each other, all the parts were in motion, and the clinging would be in vain. Sarah could only watch in dumbstruck awe as the system began to fall apart, unable to interfere. 

A new copy of this world was about to form. 

Snap! The code-pairs split. Suddenly, each segment gave up on clinging to its counterpart. They flew apart, in opposite directions. The poles, Sarah suddenly recalled, that's where they'll try to go. Still, she could do nothing. The threads kept tugging at the segments

Then, she noticed that the walls were changing, shifting ever so subtly and yet so quickly. Were they stretching? Collapsing? Both. Like a belt had been tied too tight around the waist, the walls pushed outwards as the centre cinched itself. It was then that the threads finally broke, no longer having control on the events that would transpire. 

She looked towards the parts of the walls that had stretched away; there they were! The pieces of code, safely trapped, unable to leak out. Without them, nothing would survive; there was still hope.

Wait, what was this? At each end, the two groups of code gathered together into two clusters. Around each cluster, something started to form over top - a membrane? Sarah watched as the clear substance engulfed each cluster.

The system split! Now there were two.

It was over. 

Sarah breathed a sigh of relief; she managed to survive another day without things going wrong. She could go home now.

Happy that her little cells had divided, Sarah switched off the microscope and removed her sample. All that was left to do now was to put the petri dish in the incubator and wait. 
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A response to :iconthewrittenrevolution:'s prompt. The challenge was to write a story that starts in media res. I figured that most people would start in the middle of an action-packed or emotionally-charged scene. Something exciting. 

So I decided to try the exact opposite - start in the middle of something completely ordinary (something you probably forgot about after your high school biology exam). My challenge was to make said ordinary event sound extraordinary. I decided to go for something out of my comfort zone - science fiction. Well, it isn't 'fiction', but it does have a distinct science fiction feel to it, so I put it in that category.

This one's for the biology buffs out there ;) For the rest of you, feel free to read up on cell division and mitosis: www.biology.arizona.edu/cell_b… 

I made this mainly to entertain myself, and this is likely to go over some heads, so I do not have any specific feedback questions this time around. However, you are still free to critique, and critique is always welcome :) 

This is also not an entirely serious answer to the prompt. I think I've already bent enough rules :XD:
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FoxboyPrower Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
I like biology too. You've done a good job of making this sound exciting. It's cool at first but like many things in petri dishes it gets repetitive. X3
Good use of in media res here. Never seen it used in a story so short. Nicely packed. 
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yep, if you went to someone and told them what this story was about, it would be something like:
"It's about watching cells under a microscope."
"Oh. Uh... okay. Are they like super dangerous mutated disease cells that start an epidemic? Do they grow into a monster and go on a rampage?"
"No. They just do what cells normally do. But it's written in an exciting way!"
"Um... I think I'll just take your word on that."

Thanks for the read man :)

Are you referring to the act of watching things in a petri dish being repetitive, or the story being repetitive? If you were referring to the story, was it the word choice that was repetitive? The sentence structure? Other? If you were referring to the act of watching microscopic things... yes, I would have to agree with you there. 

Sorry, I can't help but push for feedback ^^;
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FoxboyPrower Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013
That's fine. I love feedback on my own stories as well. 
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DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Biology !! I love biology. Especially in literature.
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Cool, thanks! :)
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