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I dream of you
only to wake up
alone
I don't have much to say this time around.
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jkstrlphinaestrd1780 Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this.
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British-Prophetess Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! I've chosen you as the 72nd person for my 200 Comments Project Challenge. Basically I'm giving comments to 200 different people in a time frame within a week :D (Big Grin)

Very poignant and emotionally driven at the same time. I really like the romantic feel to the piece but underneath there is a sense of longing for the loved one to be close by your side. Sometimes I felt this way during my past relationships so I feel that I can relate to the words you have expressed here. Very well done with this!
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks for the comment! :D I really appreciate the feedback. I'm glad to have been able to speak to your emotions. 

Apologies for late reply. I have been busy with work/returning to school. 
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Professional Writer
 This lovely haiku was featured 7-8-14 on Multhaiku's Twitter page, @GenreHaiku. :)
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much for the feature :D
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Professional Writer
Certainly! :D
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Haikumato Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful yet so damn sad. And true. Only haikus can get the message through with just a few little words. :heart: You did a great job! :meow:
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you :)
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Exnihilo-nihil Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Professional Writer
Hi, 

your fine work is "short poem of the week" in the greyshadow's :rose: fav.me/d6lvb58

Have a good day :)
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panda-jamican-pie Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
even though you didn't say a lot, it still has a lot of impact!
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you very much! :)
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MabusTheDark Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aye, a lazy wolf gets no prey.  

This haiku is solid, and has a wonderfully sad story.
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wolf...?

Thank you for the comment :) Out of curiosity, what do you think the story is?
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MabusTheDark Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The wolf was mostly a metaphor.  Things don't happen or change without action. ^w^

I believe the story was simply dreaming of some or something you love, and then waking up and being alone.  There wasn't much more, but there didn't need to be.
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yes, that was the story I intended. I was just curious ^^ sometimes I get an unexpected answer to "What did you think it was about?" 
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MabusTheDark Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, I hope it wasn't a letdown that I got the story right. ;)  I try to make sure I know what I'm talking about before I open my (sometimes) loud mouth.
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No no, I'm happy that I got my point across :)
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MabusTheDark Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome!  Good luck for your future work!
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you! You too!
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xxzoya-kisaxx Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist
Lovely
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you :D
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TheSideStreet Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
Oh.
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh?
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TheSideStreet Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
Not in a bad way, It was just short and sad. ;-;
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ohhhhh. 

(I was just being a smartass with my reply, lol. And thank you.)
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warriorcats16678 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Student Writer
Aw. That's sad.
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I had my intended effect then. :D
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Student Writer
short and to the point. i like it
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alphabetsoup314 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you :)

Yes, brevity is the goal of modern haiku. 
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RoguetheScarredAngel Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Student Writer
yep.
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